Reader Response draft one
The author
mentions that writing and rewriting your own
stories “can lead to behavioral changes”.
Personally, I believe that writing
and editing our own stories does not significantly result in behavioral changes,
the most vital factor is our beliefs.
Your mind is much more powerful than you
imagine, the belief is able to shape the way you act and change your behaviors.
Writing down our stories is not strong enough to lead to behavioral change,
while beliefs enable us to achieve that.
One example given by the author shows
that students who edited their own narratives about college, as compared to
those who did not, turned out to be more successful in their academics.
However, the underlying crucial factor in this study was trying to convince
students believe that it is common to struggle with studies in their first year
and they would be able to adept the new life with time pass by. The positive
results obtained significantly because students were with belief that they are
capable to change such adverse situation. This example actually reinforces my
viewpoint that your belief is, in fact, the most influential factor that can
lead to behavioral changes rather than writhing and rewriting your stories.
Another is example is that, if you
say, “I’m not a science student, I can only study arts related subjects” then
that belief works as an easy excuse for you to avoid practicing and solving scientific
or mathematical questions. This, in a short term, probably can prevent you from
failing in academics if you only take arts courses, but in the long run, your
capability to learn, improve, and develop new skills will largely be weakened. This
is how the mindset affects us. Such situation can only be changed by changing
your belief and fixed mindset, by convincing yourself to try something that you
are not good at rather than avoid them. In this case, I believe that just
writing down what you need to do to remind yourself will not necessarily lead
to behavioral changes, while belief enable us to maximize our potentials and
encourage us to overcome challenges.
In a meta-analysis of 422 studies involving 82,107 participants indicated that intentions accounted for 28% of the variance in behavior on average. Meta-analyses of correlational studies suggested that intentions affect behavior significantly, based on standard estimates of effect size (Cohen, 1992).
Organization:
ReplyDelete1. Is the writer’s thesis appropriate in relation to the summary?
a. Need to make clearer stand. The first sentence looks more like an example as there is another supporting idea in the 2nd half of the RR
2. Does the thesis contain a focused controlling idea?
a. Need more substantial examples
3. Does the transition sentence/paragraph between the summary and the
response seem well connected to/cohesive with both?
a. We are able to see the link between the summary and response.
4. Do the supporting ideas in the response seem well connected with the thesis?
a. Evidence has to support ideas better. Ideas have to be linked to the point and the main idea. No linking back
5. Are the supporting ideas well connected to each other?
a. Can be clearer but we are able to understand
Language Use:
1. Is the language in the summary clear?
a. Yes
2. Is the language in the rest of the essay clear?
a. Yes. Minor mistakes like sentence structure and spelling error.
3. Is the thesis clearly articulated?
a. Can be clearer. Organization can be reviewed. Example, Point, explanation then example. The current one lacks topic sentence in most of the paragraphs
4. As the writer summarizes the original article, is there accurate use of reporting
verbs?
a. Yes
5. Throughout the reader response has verb tense been appropriately used?
a. Minor mistakes.
6. Are there any paragraphs that seem unclear to you? (list them by number)
a. The last paragraph. Paragraph 6. Unsure if it is a point or example or?
7. Have transitions been properly used?
a. Some sentences that can be reviewed
“Additionally, comparing with expressive writing,” “As compared to expressive writing”
8. Does the reader response have any issues with punctuation?
9. Does the writer appropriately present ideas for an academic audience?
a. Should change use 3rd person instead of 1st person.
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