Wednesday, February 11, 2015

Reader Response draft 2

Reader Response 

In the article “Writing Your Way to Happiness”, Parker-Pope (2015) claims writing and rewriting your own stories “can lead to behavioral changes”. 

Personally, I believe that writing and editing our own stories does not significantly result in behavioral changes, the most vital factor is our beliefs.

One’s mind is much more powerful than imagined, the belief is able to shape people’s actions and change their behaviors. By writing down a person’s story is not strong enough to lead to behavioral changes, while beliefs enable one to achieve that. 

One example given by the author shows that students who edited their own narratives about college, as compared to those who did not, turned out to be more successful in their academics. However, the underlying crucial factor in this study was trying to convince students to believe that it is common to struggle with studies in their first year and they would be able to adept the new life with time pass by. The positive results obtained significantly because students were with belief that they are capable to change such adverse situation. This example actually reinforces my viewpoint that people’s belief is, in fact, the most influential factor that can lead to behavioral changes rather than writhing and rewriting their stories. 

Another example is that, if one say, “I’m not a science student, I can only study arts related subjects” then that belief works as an easy excuse for one to avoid practicing and solving scientific or mathematical questions. This, in a short term, probably can prevent people from failing in academics if they only take arts courses, but in the long run, their capabilities to learn, improve, and develop new skills will largely be weakened. This is how the mindset can affect people’s behaviors. Such situation can be changed by changing people’s beliefs and fixed mindsets, by convincing them to try something that they are not good at. However, in this case, I believe that just writing down what an individual need to do will not necessarily lead to behavioral changes since one’s behavior is actually controlled and leaded by his beliefs as well as mindset which reflect what they really want to achieve. Therefore, as far as I am concerned, belief enable a person to maximize his potential and encourage him to overcome challenges, which in turn leads to behavioral changes. 

Additionally, as compared to expressive writing, another stronger factor that can engender behavioral changes is people’s intention which is determined by their attitudes.  “Theories of attitude– behavior relations, models of health behavior, and goal theories all converge on the idea that intention is the key determinant of behavior (summarized by Abraham, Sheeran, & Johnston, 1998; Austin & Vancouver, 1996; Conner & Norman, 1996; Eagly & Chaiken, 1993; Gollwitzer & Moskowitz, 1996; Maddux, 1999).” One with intention to achieve certain goals has strong self-motivation, which may lead to behavioral changes in a significant way. Writing down plans and aims, undeniably, acting as a checklist or a reminder, enables us to have a proper schedule, however, whether one will take action or not is mainly depending on his intention and attitude. A meta-analysis of 422 intention-behavior correlational studies illustrated that, in average, 28% of the behavioral variation is due to an individual’s intention, and thus intentions affect behavior significantly(Cohen, 1992). Therefore, in my opinion, writing and editing a person’s story does not significantly result in behavioral changes but more account for one’s belief, intention and attitude. 

1 comment:

  1. Hi Xinzhu,

    We enjoyed reading your response. Your ideas have been clearly presented. There are just some grammatical & citation errors that you need to take note of so that you may improve in your 3rd draft :)

    1. The use of “I”, “your”, “we” & “our” are not appropriate for an academic audience
    2. “…powerful than imagined, the belief is able.” maybe you can use a connector such as “as” or “because” as the objective of the sentence is unclear
    3. “By writing down…”
    4. “…the underlying crucial factor in this study was trying to convince students..”  The factor following this is a noun but the sentence you wrote refers to an action
    5. “…students were with belief…”  Students believe that
    6. “…if one say, “I’m not a science student, I can only study arts related subjects” then..” subject verb agreement
    7. “…will largely be weakened…”  Will be largely weakened
    8. “…an individual need…” subject verb agreement
    9. “…belief enable a person…”  subject verb agreement
    10. “…behavioral changes is people’s intention…” subject verb agreement
    11. (summarized by Abraham, Sheeran, & Johnston, 1998; Austin & Vancouver, 1996; Conner & Norman, 1996; Eagly & Chaiken, 1993; Gollwitzer & Moskowitz, 1996; Maddux, 1999)  wrong way of citation
    12. “Writing down plans and aims, undeniably, acting as a checklist or a reminder, enables us to have a proper schedule, however, whether one will take action or not is mainly depending on his intention and attitude.”  “act”, “enabling” & “is mainly dependent”
    13. References are missing

    -Hazwani & Zimin

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